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Well I hope you guys like my prologue that I have managed to do for my story, it has helped me take my mind off other things. :)

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Akemi was in school wich overlooked a beautiful lake, she was daydreaming about Kaito and she longed to be able to see him. They had been childhood friends, grown up in the same neighbourhood but had drifited apart when they had gotten into the higher grades of school. She wished things would go back to the way they were, where she didn't have to worry about anything. She just wanted to be able to live her life without a care in the world. Now all she could think about was if she didn't get the right grades then she wouldn't be able to become key-frame animator at her local animation studio where she has always wanted to work.

 

Kaito was in front of her, she kept gazing at the back of his head. Her heart kept fluttering slightly. She longed for him to turn around and smile at her. But he never did, he kept his eyes fixed at the front of the class. She sighed to herself a little and stared down at her desk feeling a little sad. It was as if he had stopped noticing her, like she was invisible and he didn't want anything to do with her anymore.

This is what I have so far for my story. I wish I was a better writer, but I tried my best :)

And also thanks to @Banrifor helping me out with it :)

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Thanks for sharing, your character is very relatable. As far as being a better writer, it just takes practice 😊 so keep going and you’ll reach new ground all the time!

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What a bittersweet start. I hope writing is a productive outlet for the both of us, @VampireKnight19. I'm excited to see future updates of your story, so let's see where the journey of writing takes us.

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4 minutes ago, Seshi said:

Thanks for sharing, your character is very relatable. As far as being a better writer, it just takes practice 😊 so keep going and you’ll reach new ground all the time!

Thank you :) I'm going through something very similar with an old childhood friend at the moment so thought I would turn it into a story :)

@Kinbaryu I'm sure writing will be great for the both of us :) 

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That's an excellent start @VampireKnight19 !

I'm looking forward to seeing how this develops :)

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5 hours ago, Banri said:

That's an excellent start @VampireKnight19 !

I'm looking forward to seeing how this develops :)

Thank you ❤️

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On 7/2/2019 at 9:38 PM, joshua_patterson.16 said:

flawless, true poetry, writing of the most earnest degree

Thank you :)

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Daaaaark start, I digg it. 

I need a bit more of this prologue, it feels like the setting is just being introduced. 

bakugan but for anime lol. Can't wait to see what gets this story's wheels turning. 

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Well, I like it a lot, relatable character, nice intro, got my attention. Just a couple of tense (past/future tense) issues but other than that its really good. :) 

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